Friday, 26 August 2016

Olympic Moment in Time



                                                                                   
WALT: Describe a moment in time in detail.
Peter Burling and I won a gold in the men’s rowing it felt really exciting we crossed over first wow and we were holding on with when1 hand and waving to the crowd going completely wild.
We were speeding like a comet going for the gold medal today.
It felt amazing and emotional to win the gold medal at the 2016 Rio Olympics.
I wondered how people predicted that we would
win a gold medal in the men’s sailing?
I felt confused because I didn’t really believe that we would get a gold medal, until we did.







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2 comments:

  1. Abbie29 August 2016 at 11:11

    Hi Holly,I like how you used A simile in your Olympic writing.
    Next step is to use full stops at the end of sentences.
    By Abbie

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  2. Aamaria7 September 2016 at 14:25

    Hi Holly
    I really liked you used capital letters and full stops
    One question why did you choose him
    and maybe next time could you tell us the persons name your writing about.

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